Story being written

[Avril Black]

"So how are you feeling walking with the ladies", Helen was looking Resplendant in her new Rubber Mac,"Slightly outnumbered and quite heady,"I replied ." Comfortable,yet hesitant". Ursula continued,"How sore are your noipples,stinging and erect, are your pants sweaty and is your little man firming up".They laughed and I blushed which was noticed. Alma spoke"Christina you are forgetting some of the house rules when you address us we are Mistress Ama, Mistress Helen Mistress Ursula".They stopped and then Helen took me to task."lt is blatantly obvious that your not listening".She began to undo the buttons on my cape."Well listen to me,remember your manners,Ursula your crop if you please,such a quiet tranquil place on a weekday,no one to hear you whimper,I can see you have been harbouring an erection,slide your knickers down and pull your rubber pants around your ankles".The rain was falling as she spread my cape back over my shoulders,she held the crop out and then it was whipped across my now fully enlarged penis. "Now that we have your full attention yon will masturbate yourself with you rubber gloves,then you will mop up your mess with this cloth,sluts must and will learn to obey the Mistress".I did as I was bid coming in a gush and the kneeling to clean it. I adjusted my self ,the cape was reinstated and we walked on.

[Mackymick]

It's impossible to read this. Some are repeated some are out of order. Why can you not just write a complete story and be done with it. This is a waste of time. Not the first time it's been mentioned either.

[mason]

It's impossible to read this. Some are repeated some are out of order. Why can you not just write a complete story and be done with it. This is a waste of time. Not the first time it's been mentioned either.

I agree. I'm also annoyed too, not the least because I made the effort to condense Avril's story into one convenient thread so she could continue posting chapters in it. (It's 30 minutes of my life I'll never get back.)

Instead she is STILL hijacking valuable real estate for this badly written and hard-to-read, pornographic dribble.

[Mackymick]

At last! Thank you for your support! Perhaps we can now get back to some sort of normality? Everybody has different tastes, and fetishes, but this was so long winded, and yes, in my consideration, a bit over the top, gross. I want to read about rainwear, and a little more, is fine, Im not a total prude! If a story has to be put up in 'chunks' can it not be for a total of two or three maximum? It then gives other authors a chance to show their writing prowess?!? Avril is not the only one who has done this in the past. As you say, real estate is not cheap!!!

[blackmacjay]

Perhaps there is a case, but not much of one, if the writer never attended an English Language class.

But, on the other hand, if he or she did, the resulting b"blurb" is so badly written, that I gave up on reading their outcome.

[Avril Black]

Thanks for the complementary remarks. Yes I do seem to have got off on the wrong foot.Askingfor help seems to be difficult, as I write this my screen is covered by the keypad,will try to change the name of the story and try to contact mason one more time. Apologies for my incompetence. Avril.

[Mackymick]

Mason has contacted you again today. Do you not read your comments?